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Dec 14, 2009 | 12:11 AM EST
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4.9 MB
4 min 18 sec
Score
4.19 / 5.00

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Rated 4.19 / 5 stars
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Electronic - Techno
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Author Comments

This is one of the songs were working on for our album. This track is mostly done, but may still be edited slightly before its released, mainly towards the end. We only recently started using FL so any tips would be cool. More songs soon to follow.

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HaggardHaggard

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

Good try

It sounds as if there are still some parts missing in this song, but I think what you have created now definitely sounds good.

I like the slow tempo of this song, it sounds funny and very interesting at the same time.

However, the melody that starts at around 0:41 sounds a bit too generic and the instrument you chose does indeed sound a bit annoying. It also doesn't really fit that well to the rest of the sounds. It's a bit too high and too outstanding for my taste.

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CoopCoop

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

Secondary melody needs work

I think that there's a duff note in the secondary melody, so that needs to be tweaked to deal with that. It's not a bad effort for someone who hasn't had much practice with the program, but it needs to be given a little more in variation - try putting some additional bass beat into the piece to keep it going. This can produce a much better sound and give us all something to listen to that isn't so repetitive.

You have a good start and end - it's a shame that they don't really loop, as that's the most variation you have in the track. When the melody and counter melody come in and take over,t here is very little else that can be said for the track. Solos, modulations (changes of key) and additional instruments are your friends here and you should experiment with them. Good luck.

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StepStep

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

Pretty good for a newcomer to FL :)

It's a unique song, and as the guy below me (I'm not going to say his massive and complex username...) said, it's quite creative too. It does have its defects, but that's what practice is for, right?

Well, the melodies are OK. The one at 1:49 was quite good, but overall I think the melodies were a little simplistic. For example, the melody played first at around 0:41. It had the same length for every note - i.e, only crotchets. The only melody which had different note lengths in it was the one at 1:49. Maybe if you could make the melodies a little more catchy and slightly more complex, it'd be better ;). Also, for a song this long, I think this needs a lot more alternate melodies. You only had around 5 different melodies in a 4:18 song and some slightly annoying buzzing ambience in the background, so I'd suggesting adding at least 4 more melodies. Background accompaniment, if not repetitive, was actually quite good.

The instruments are pretty weird, but fit with the theme of the song. Perhaps you can add a pad somewhere; I mean, the only 'pad' was the ambience in the background, which did get rather annoying to listen to. I'd suggest googling for some pad samples or something; maybe learning how to use a VST such as z3ta+, Vanguard (much simpler) or learning how to use Sytrus (Blackhole12 made an awesome in-depth Sytrus guide which you can access in his first newspost). Also, a bassy synth would do wonders over here if used correctly. You could also add some vocal samples or sound effects or something to remove some of the monotony that this song has.

The transitions aren't too good, I'm afraid. Some instruments seemed to come in randomly throughout the whole song. Use stuff like reverse cymbals and fade-ins to introduce new instruments, instead of making them come in so suddenly. Oh, and the transition at 0:13 doesn't really sit well with me. The drum beat changed abruptly; if I were you, I'd add a kick roll at about 0:11 to indicate that a new drum beat is about to come in. Another issue with the drum transitions: the loud cymbals at 3:46 came in a bit too suddenly; try adding a drum roll before it. The buildup at the beginning was pretty good, but I'd suggest fading in that instrument at 0:41.

The structure is quite weird. I'm not sure which melody is the main melody and which melody is a counter-melody. Instead of thinking up a few alternate melodies and playing them randomly throughout the song, you should get one main melody along with some background instruments and repeat that a few times throughout the song along with some alternate melodies and interludes in-between, since as the structure is right now, the song sounds a little cluttered and messy. The variety needs a little working on too; as I said above, this needs more alternate melodies, and some subtle changes here and there along with some vocal samples and sound effects wouldn't hurt :)...

The intro is OK, with a good buildup as I already said, but I think starting the drums up immediately in the song made the intro a bit abrupt. Either you fade the first drum beat in, or remove the drum beat from 0:00-0:13 and at 0:12 you add a filler which would indicate that the drums are about to come in (by a filler, I mean something like this:
http://www.mediafire.com/?z2lfm4kmnno
Where at 0:01 there's a small filler of half a bar to say that the drum beat is about to start.) As for the ending, it's not too bad; I liked that you ended it with the ambience, but I think that at 3:59 the song stopped way too abruptly. Either you fade it out or add an ending note.

The drums aren't too good. The beats were simplistic (kick-cymbal for most of the song) and it got quite repetitive. Samples were OK, but this needs more variety regarding samples and beats. They were just the right volume though, good job with that ^^.

If you continue your songs at this rate, I'm sure you'll turn out to be a great producer. For one of your first songs, it's impressive. Good job overall, and sorry if this review is a little harsh...
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Chomposaur responds:

Harsh? nah, i appreciate it! i'll definatly take your advice. Im not good at song structure or music theory, so those are some points i will take into consideration.


CRASHAKEZULA81CRASHAKEZULA81

Rated 4 / 5 stars

Interesting.

I gve you points for creativity. Not too often you see tecchno in a tempo like this. It's very laid back, very soft and somewhat relaxing. Though the track seems a bit repeative, you cancel that out with the additive instrument deal. I enjoyed it.


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Chomposaur responds:

Thanks! I'll keep your thoughts in mind, i intend to do another mix soon.