Sweet

In west Philadelphia
born and raised
on the playground my momma said
most of my days
chilling out, maxing
and relaxing all cool
and all shooting some b-ball
outside of school
when a couple of guys
they were up to no good
started making trouble in our neighborhood
i got in one little fight and my mom got scared
she said your moving
in with your auntie and uncle in Bel-Air

i whisted for a cab and when it came near
the license plate said fresh
and had dice in the mirror
if anything i could say that this cab was rare
but i thought nah, forget it
yo home to bel-air!

i-pulled- up tp a house about seven or eight
i yelled to the cabbie yo home, smell you later
looked at my kingdom i was finally there
to sit on my throne as the prince of bel-air

Fantastic..

Srsly, this is a great piece, it hits something deep inside each of us whihc is just yearning to come out. U helped it to burst out. This piece is fantastic!

The strings and piano blended in brilliantly, i always like strings and piano, ever since i heard some of my fav authors on NG use them together fantastically, ive been on the lookout for string and piano.

The fact that u used a flute also helped seeign as im a great fan of the flute. However, the one thing i didnt like was that the ending cut off a bit too abruptly. Maybe u could wokr on that a bit more.

Overall, fantastic piece!

Darklight17
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Nice an Pretty

If I where a dick I'd say this sounds like a generic love ballad, but since I'm not I'll be much more subtle about it. :)

Everything fits well together, the strings sort of following the main beats of the piano. But they don't seem to do anything to different from the main theme the piano has set.

The same can kind of be said with the other instruments that where added in. This isn't to say it 's a bad thing, it would just be nice to hear a bit more variation, and maybe a chord change somewhere.

And I don't know if anyone else noticed this, but the song seems a little right heavy. I mean this by, since i use headphones to listen and the right side seems to have more noise going to it throughout, and since I have weird hearing, it kind of distracted me a bit.

But other than those few problems I liked it, it was pretty. =3

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Good use of strings

I've always liked the sound of strings combined with Pianos - ever since I listened to Queen as a small child. This piece is slightly different from those beginnings, but it stills trikes a powerful chord within.

I think that this is a nicely arranged piece that really gets into the sound and feel of a well laid out piece that sounds tranquil and triumphant. The imagery that floats around my head is such like the farm worker, relaxing on a grassy hill in the middle of summer, with a wheat stalk protruding from his mouth. The whole feeling should be not a care in the world and that's pretty much what you've given us.

A nice sound from the flute solo and the way that it compliments the harp is very nice - some very powerful instruments that you've chosen to use there, which can be unwieldy, but this is a good set up and none of them become too controlling of the piece, working kind of like a relay team to get through. Brilliant.

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Very nice

I like this song, it's very nice and has a good atmosphere. Also I think the intro is good as it is now. I like the slow fade in of the piano. Then when it is fully faded in, some other instruments join the piano. As I've said, I like it and I don't think you should change it (sorry aliaspharow, but I have to disagree with you here :P ).

Anyway, I think the song's strongess is that it is quite slow. You give the song time to develop, the melodies have a much better impact on the listener that way, imo. If you speed this up chances are that it all may sound too hectic and thus you would ruin the song.

However, there are sometimes a few background sounds that don't fit too good into the song, for example at 2:26. It just sounds a bit off to me.

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