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Oct 18, 2009 | 4:36 PM EDT
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5.2 MB
2 min 51 sec
4.04 / 5.00

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Rated 4.04 / 5 stars
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Beat is "Through the Storm" by LuigiSounds

The next day Gary bails out on his last class
in the hall he pasts Jack and needs to act fast
he turns around to follow him and knows what the problem is
the thing stopping him was he didn't know how to get him
but thinks for a second and suddenly he's got it
he catches up and shoves him in the janitor's closet
comes out swinging, Jack begging him to stop it
Gary busts his jaw quick and beats him unconscious
grabs the fire blanket to cover up this shit
then grabs some paper towels to wipe the blood off his fists
goes home and then later the phone rings
they question Gary and he says he doesn't know a thing
Gary said Jack was lying and had beat on his brother
she asked if he could prove it and he just said fuck her
there was no evidence so Gary had justice served
he had let the anger build up so much it hurt

One night his sister leaves at 7:04
at around 8 there's a knock on the door
Gary goes and opens it to see what they wantin
and instead sees his sister crying with her make up running
normally on dates, she stays out really late
and always gets caught opening that creaky gate
but she looks up at Gary with pain in her eyes
she mutters "he wouldn't stop" and Gary's face turns white
he helps her sit down and tells her not to move
hands her a tissue and runs to his room
puts his jacket on and grabs his car keys
then asks his sister who it was and where is he?
she told him the address and said please don't kill him
Gary yells "this guy came close to giving you children"
then runs out the house and drives faster than disease
and sees the house to which target had fleed

he parks a block away and walks up to the house
rings the doorbell and the mom comes out
asks her for her son and she says one second
and disappears from the door and goes to get him
Eric was on the phone and yelled one minute
then Gary sees him walking out of his red kitchen
Eric sees who it is and quickly tries to shut the door
but Gary grabs him by the neck and drags him to the porch
throws him on the ground and stomps on his face
kicks him in the ribs until he hears them break
Eric starts yelling as blood pours out his mouth
Gary kicks some more teeth out and then pulls his gun out
aims his first shot at what Eric used to abuse
then stomps where he shot to make sure the message got through
Eric screams so loud that the parents come out
they see their son laying there and start to shout
Gary runs to his car and begins to leave
and sees red and blue light already on the street
ditches the car and runs, but the cops trap him
he knows he'll get ten years for what had just happened
if he argued about the rape the judge wouldn't believe him
and sentence Gary and let Eric continue with freedom
looks at his gun, he has one bullet left
so he bites on the shit and puts it into his head



Rated 5 / 5 stars

Great Job

I came about this song before I heard part one, and the story didn't make much sense. But I liked the beat and was intrigued enough to look up part one, then it all made sense. Good job with the song, and the story you made was great. Keep up the good work!

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denverbroncos59 responds:

Appreciate you listening man, glad you enjoyed it!


Rated 3 / 5 stars

aight look

the lyrics, flow and beat is raw
but the vocals are terrible

denverbroncos59 responds:

Haha I agree XD my voice is horrible on this. Thanks for the review


Rated 4.5 / 5 stars


pretty good

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Rated 5 / 5 stars

man love the story

it was really good i enjoyed it. good ending as well really good work mate

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denverbroncos59 responds:

Thanks :D


Rated 1.5 / 5 stars


that was like a guy reading a short story with music in the background.

denverbroncos59 responds:

ZOMG you mean that somebody had the nerve to say a story on a TOPICAL track :O