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Hell-0
So, I said I was going to be musically away from newgrounds for a while. I didn't let on why. So the reason why is:
I'm trying to complete a 13 song album.
Here I am, Stuck on song 4.

I NEED YOUR HELP.

Right now this is a rough copy, mix, and voxed up song. The notes are a bit off from time to time, as I"m just messing with melodies still. Where I'm stuck is, on the chorus melody, and would love some feed back.

So far I have two chorus melodies. One at 0:57 and the other at 2:00.

Here are all the lyrics for you.

I wake up screaming to myself
I've waited for so long
Take my place on the top of the shelf
I don't see where I could have been wrong

A view to the lepers of society
an itch, a tick, no reality
A sense of end draws before my eyes
In a world that I despise

I'm screaming for the fixing light
A crushing weight begins this task
My whole world begins to shake
Despise the moment, wear your mask

(Chorus 1)

WHat's done to me
Gets done through you
Everything I see and feel
Are the only things that I can wield.
What's done to you
Gets done through me
I don't lack the guild you do
So I can lie and set you free.

I fall to pieces and they lie on the floor
This is the end, can there be any more?
I see the mirror and its empty inside
I don't look back for insanity's ride

I'm screaming for the fixing light
A crushing weight begins this task
My whole world begins to shake
Despise the moment, wear your mask

(Chorus 2)

Falling to pieces
Here to survive
Falling to pieces
No one gets out alive.X2

bla bla, stuff, solo

Edn.

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Score: 10

"hey man what program do you use for recording?"

by: Marxist-Tsar

date: November 16, 2009

this sounds great man, i love the driving guitar. im the guitarist for the band solidus who you commented on earlier btw. thanks for the compliment. haha

sadly me and my roommate have quite rudimentary recording methods atm so it doesnt sound as good as it could. so i was just wondering what programs would be best to have a professional sound like yours to add to our sound that much more.

November 22, 2009

Author's Response:

Sweet man.
Thanks for the comments!
I use Cool Edit Pro to record. It's old, but It is all I need. I owe a whackload of clarity and nice sounds to my pod x3.
Line 6 products are really awesome for home recording. Cool edit pro is also underestimated in my opinion. Before it's capabilities were even tapped, people moved on to Cubase and Sonar...which are also awesome recording programs.

Cool edit pro has turned into adobe audition. I still haven't updated because I'm pretty comfortable with the old ass software I have. :D

Thanks again, dude. Hopefully this helps. :D

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Score: 10

"Awesome Dude"

by: afunk

date: November 15, 2009

Kicked some serious ass man. What did you se for the guitar tones, amps miced or a modelor? Whatever you used it sounds stellar.

November 15, 2009

Author's Response:

Thanks very much. I'm currently using a pod x3. Best investment I've ever made. It's plugged into my line in. And thats it. Glad you dig the song!! Thanks for the feedback!\m/

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Score: 10

"Chorus 1!"

by: Jophie

date: November 14, 2009

Love what you have done with the song thus far, and my vote goes to chorus number 1. Its heavier with emotion, not just with the words, but with the melody as well. =)

By the way, I love the sound of the vocals on 'I'm screaming for the fixing light...'etc. before the chorus. Its really fitting for the lyricks at that portion.

- Jophie

November 15, 2009

Author's Response:

Thanks very much, dude! I've been working pretty hard on the various styles of vocals. :D I'm happy to hear its being noticed.
Thanks for the review.
AS for the choruses, I'm kind of expanding this song and it will include both. :D

Thanks again.\m/

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Score: 10

"I'd like to help you out man"

by: Demon-Slayer12

date: November 10, 2009

I like those melodies actually, but I think the guitar could use a little more midrange to make it a little thicker. Your voice sounds pretty good man, your singing is better now. But if you're looking for a guest solo, I'd be more than happy to contribute, since we haven't done a collab in years hahaha! Some really good riffs here man, I really like it.. cheers bro!

November 15, 2009

Author's Response:

I'd be happy to have a guest soloer or two. I am thinking of trying to sell the album, as well as offering all the songs here at a lower quality. But the solos would have to be by donation. haha. Splitting the tiny amounts of money that MAY be made with it would be tough. But to get purchases up, I'm going to include a suprise free badman hoodie. haha.