Score: 8
"Not quite there."
date: November 12, 2009
You aimed for a little madness, and got psychosis instead. This piece contains nothing of the uplifting meaning behind the quote, nor any feeling of liberation.
Rather, it contains the dark side of madness, the kind where you sit in a cell, locked away from humanity for your dangerous nature. You nailed the isolation feeling, and the sense of madness. But it is not the liberating kind that perhaps you should have been after.
That would have been achieved through a faster tempo, a more upbeat tune, and a number of different melodies running in different time signatures. Perhaps even counter melodies. A sort of jarring Tom and Jerry style music, full of bright sound and demented laughter.
At least, that how I would have interpreted that quote.
Your piece conveyed the feeling, and would work perfectly in a film. But it didn't quite meet what you were aiming for, and as a soundscape, it won't have the same impact a melody would.
Nevertheless, excellent piece. Keep on making music!
Krayon
November 12, 2009
Author's Response:
Well I was aiming to blend madness and liberation within the same musical structure, without switching tempo or tone. I do see your point. Perhaps if this was actually part of a film or a more elaborate body of work, I could have given the concept a bit more nuance. Thank you for reviewing !
