well

where i appreciate your support and enthusiasm for my version, i am not a liar. i voted eight because of course it can be improved. :D (voted 5 though :D)

there isnt alot going on really. you could improve by adding more instruments. the square synth is a little outdated though. try finding a fresher sound for the melody. with more energy, breath and bounce :D your beat is fine i think. im not up on beats but it sounds okay to me. the bass is good too. add some other activity... maybe an arp or string playing chords... i dont know. its your creativity that makes the song what it is.:D just broaden your mind and you willl improve if you try :D good job on this. :D very good job :D