Ok i hear ya!

good music i hear where your going with it. keep going Im feeling it.

"Disjointed and unenjoyable"

This sounds way too generic, the bass is alright, but thats about the only thing that doesn't sound mashed in. The lyrics are generic, and do not flow like hip hop should. Listen to some atmosphere. Thats how good hip hop should sound. Keep trying man, It's not my intention to make you feel bad and stop making music, just to remind you that you have a long way to go. Shift things up, write lyrics with other people, and get those lyrics flowing better. Use really big words that just flow right into each other.

Best of luck.

wak-a-juice

lol this is wak

yeah, uh

what a joke

sorry buddy

dont quit your day job