Score: 10
"Holy crap"
date: September 9, 2009
I just listened and read all your Chronicles.
I have to say, i really enjoy listening to your music, but these songs are really special. I had goosebumps!
Now i know how much you like it when people write stories that go along with, so i will do just that. However, i won't write an ending of the story you started, but i will write a whole new one. This is because i read Blackattackbitch's review and i don't think i can come up with something better.
Prologue:
This story is about Ívarr.
Ívarr lives in Norway, around 1900. He lives in a village called Tørkæ, near the sea. The men who live in the village are pirates and when they run out of supplies they plunder other villages with brute force.
When they plundered a village there's not much is left of it, except a couple of burning houses and corpses laying on the ground. That's why the men of the village of Tørkæ are feared by many other villages. And when the name of the men of the village of Tørkæ is heared, people begin to speak about Ívarr who is the brutal leader of the men of the village of Tørkæ.
And when they return home to their village, they are welcomed like soldiers who have just won a war, but that is far from what they have really done.
00:00-00:15
Ívarr wakes up in his house.
His wife made him some fish for breakfast.
Ívarr says to his wife: ''I don't want fish for breakfast!''
''You have to eat breakfast'' his wife responds. ''We don't have any other food left, you and the man will have to get new supplies today.''
Ívarr mumbles a bit and starts to eat his fish.
00:16-00:48
After he ate the fish he starts to gather the men of the village.
''Today'' Ívarr speaks. ''Today, we are going to plunder another village. But this time, it will not be easy. We already plundered a lot of other villages and as you know we have a rule that we never plunder the same village twice. So this time, we will have to plunder the village of Mæri.''
00:49-01:04
Everybody holds their breath. The men of the village of Mæri are their greatest enemies. Just like the men of the village of Tørkæ, they plunder other villages for supplies. The only big difference is, that they are not violent and brutal. But when it comes to it, they are really good fighters.
01:05-01:38
The men kiss their wifes goodbye and get on board of the ship. Then the ship sails away, in the direction of the village of Mæri.
During the trip the men are very silent. They know that some of them might not reach the end of the day.
01:38-03:00
Ívarr starts to speak to his men: ''Men, we all know that it's going to be a tough day today. Some of us might not survive. If you don't want to fight with me, then speak up now, because i want to let you know that fighting with me is a choice. Do you choose not to fight and slowly die of starvation or do you choose to fight with a risk that you might die in the battlefield?! Can you imagine a death more heroic and beautiful that dieing in a battle field? I don't! Do you want to fight with me?!!''
''YEAH!!''
03:01-03:57
The ship slowly turns around a corner and in the distance they can see the village of Mæri. Nobody speaks as they slowly approach their target.
03:58-04:04
All of the men grab their weapons and the ship arrives at the village. They run towards the village screaming and shouting.
04:05-04:59
The battle begins.
Blood is everywhere. Women are screaming and children are running. But the men of the village of Mæri fight back.
The men of the village of Tørkæ try to kill everything that comes in their sight with brute force, but it doesn't work. The men of the village of Mæri are much better fighters and soon Ívarr notices that he is the only one left. His opponents are surrounding him and their leader steps forward and speaks.
''You will shed no blood, no more!''
He hits Ívarr hard with axe. Ívarr is decapitated. Slowly Ívarr's body falls to the ground.
05:00-05:06
When the news of the slaughter arrives at the village of Tørkæ it seems like everybody is in shock. Not because the men died, but because they will slowly die of starvation.
I am out of characters!! :-)
September 10, 2009
Author's Response:
Epic review. That is literally all I can say. Epic my friend!
Thanks for this amazing review!
-Gravey-