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Date
08/09/2009
File Info
Song
1.9 MB
2 min 6 sec
Score
3.97 / 5.00

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Score:
Rated 3.97 / 5 stars
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Genres:
Hip Hop, Rap, R&B - Hip Hop - Modern
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Author Comments

Just another story. I spent a decent time trying to mix/master this song. It's still not that good, but atleast I'm trying now! Kudos to some amazing music by YunVeroz: Serial (remove the space) http://www.newgrounds.com /audio/listen/195819

Edit: Fooled around with some volumes. The background vocals were aggravating me too... Hope they're slightly better now!

EditEdit: Word, top 'o the charts! Thanks fellas (it's NG, I know you're all fellas)! My comp crashed and I've lost the original recording of this so I can't make changes, but I do appreciate all feedback and will use it on future productions. Make sure you check out YunVeroz if you like this, he's got loads of quality stuff, it's mindboggling.

My man Jones came from a broken home,
At the age of fifteen he was living all alone,
Had to eat to survive so he stole all the time,
From the young and the old and the deaf and the blind,
And the cops didn't find it funny,
Poor dummy gotta make your own money,
If you wanna stop running,
But he kept on gunnin,
He started havin fun,
And pretty soon he was locked in cell 21.

Didn't stay long cause he was only a kid,
But Jones hadn't learnt his lesson from the time that he did,
Tried to fit in with the cool kids, messin up his school grades,
Only thing he wanted was respect like the movies,
But cinemas not the best parental figure,
And his mind needed guidance from somebody who had been there,
Try to teach him morals stead of screamin with the chorus of,
Not our problem, someone deal with him for us,
Poor us, we got problems of our own.

So, alone Mr Jones roamed homes,
Slept beneath the stars on the street,
Where the cars all beep,
Cause they all got somewhere to go,
Jones, hated laughs cause he wasn't included,
Wouldn't talk shit cause he couldn't refute it,
Learned to blend in, tried to take as he please,
Wasn't ever gonna beg for money down on his knees,
Cause he wasn't a bum.

But then again a bum he would become,
Jones never finished school and he slept in a slum,
Now you're probably expecting some kind of a break,
Jones'll find a mistake in his mis-woven fate,
But no, he never found his only golden ticket,
Never came around pity for a lonely sick kid,
In fact it's almost like he never existed,
He died under a bridge and no one missed him.

And the cars still beeped, and the people still shook,
Took two weeks to find him cause nobody looked,
Jones was buried in a cemetery, barely remembered,
In a world of people just as dead as him.

Reviews


Shong1upShong1up

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

Old school hip-hop w/ Sick lyrics

I know this is hip-hop and the beat has to loop, but you gotta find a better producer. The beat brings this song down BIG TIME. Other than than I wish this song had a chorus and was longer than 3 minutes. Fix that this song would be golden!



MikeMarvelMikeMarvel

Rated 5 / 5 stars

I didn't expect to be moved on Newgrounds!

This made me stop and think after I listened to it. Very deep, very good. You're an inspiration to us all-or at least to me.


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BigRed responds:

I'm glad I've made you think, I don't think there's any better reaction to get to a song!


EliTe1238EliTe1238

Rated 5 / 5 stars

AWSOME-TASTIC and real

I have listened to this song alot ant its still amazing. The song hase great rythem and the words just dont rhyme they tell a story. And in a way this story is kind of true, alot of us dont see whats happening outside of our homes and out of our reach.


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BigRed responds:

Sank yoo sir!


DaMuXDaMuX

Rated 5 / 5 stars

This must be the greatest rap song ever created.

It has an awesome lyrics that you can learn a lot from.
The violin tapping and the orchestra makes the song a little sader.
The old-skool beat and the bass sound perfect togeather.
I hope you will become famous some time!
Wish ya the best of luck, dawg!

{MuX}


BigRed responds:

Something we all adore,
Something we're dying for,
Nothing but pain stuck in this game,
Searching for fortune and fame.


patpopatpo

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

Fair.

The lyrics are superb.
The rhythm is great.

The only thing that this song needs is a well-balanced chorus.

I uploaded it onto youtube, ( I Guarantee Credit)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pdgD0D R5qa8


BigRed responds:

Meh, I'm growing really tired of trying to make everything I write have three verses and a chorus. I think I want to experiment with song structure, change it up a little bit. This song is all about the story, I wrote a few hooks but really didn't feel them and cut them out.