Score: 7
"Builds... and plateaus."
date: July 26, 2009
I like this. I really do.
But your intro builds lots of anticipation which the tune ... doesn't deliver on.
The buildup up to around :40 is *perfect*. The drums hit and your production continues to build... but around :55 seconds and nothing else really happens.
Sure, you've got the piano jam, but the piano is acting like it's background to something that doesn't exist. I would have loved to see another set of badass drums intro somewhere around the 1 minute mark and use more varied piano dynamics (playing louder and softer) and staccato, accented playing to really help carry the rhythm as a piano is a percussive+melodic instrument.
Between a more dynamic piano part and a more varied drum track (instead of just a couple-bar loop throughout the whole thing), this could have easily been a solid-10 and a five-star rating.
7 & 4 from me because the intro was so awesome, the arrangement is nice, and overall production quality doesn't seem to lack. The composition itself scores a little lower in my book, for reasons I mentioned above.
I'd love to see a 'version 2' of this.
July 26, 2009
Author's Response:
awesome my friend. THanks you for the feedback on this. This is the kind of thing I like to read. Most of my songs seem to suffer from this, where it builds and then it just repeats until it fades kinda thing. I definitely need to build more upon it, and also make the piano more dynamic in terms of note velocity etc.
For this review I will continue to work on it and surely there will be a version 2 soon.
thanks buddy :-]
