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Just experimented again. I tried the rock genre. My first time, tell me what i need to improve on, thanks

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Score: 7

"ok let's see"

by: Damphr

date: July 6, 2009

Okay
The first thing you must improve is your "drum line". That doesn't sounds like rock drum. Thats the worst part of the song.

The guitar lines are pretty much good n' groovy, it sounds good. Maybe getting a better "guitar sound" would help a bit. Or at least, try with some more distortion or overdrive.

And i think i don't hear any "bass line". The bass is maybe not a fun instrument, but in rock, it's pretty much important.

(by the way, i know you are better than me, but i've played drum and guitar for so many years that i think my tips canbe useful to you, maybe. lol)

c ya (3/5*)

July 7, 2009

Author's Response:

Thanks man. Yea I dont know too much about drums and guitars. Yea I need a base line true. And THOSE DRUMS LOL. yea man i know what you mean. We can help eachother out here and both become great. Potential is universal. Appreciate the constructive criticism! PEace

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by: Cornilious

date: July 4, 2009

One thing about the rock genre is that it usually has choruses, verses, bridges. Melodies change and the rhythm does too. Try using a chord progression to start off your song next time, then build a melody and song structure around that. I'm not saying that you have to do it that way at all. Just see what happens. Also try, if at all possible, to get real guitar tracks (it makes your music so much better).
A bass track would be nice too if you can manage that.

July 4, 2009