Score: 7
"__REVIEW FROM CONTEST__"
date: August 14, 2009
FINAL SCORE - 79 *averaged from all judges*
I enjoyed the idea and it did make me laugh. However some of the acting was a bit questionable. I couldnt actually feel like this was really going on. Sometimes it sounded as if a guy was talking into a mic! And we all know thats not wahts REALLY going on now dont we? The originality had to be cut off just a hair because obviously the DAVE thing has been done before. Hehe, great though that EVERYONE is named Dave. Thats funny. I would recommend seriously GETTING A NEW MIC. The one your currently have has tons of crackling and white noise. You have a good range of voices, now get a new mic, contact some artists saying you can help, and see what your capable of. - 73
Thanks for entering the contest! *read below to see what the other judges said*
NAXSTER SAYS:
Acting 32 / 35
Fit 25 / 25
Originality 15 / 15
Range 15 / 15
Mixing 9 / 10
96/100
COMMENTS: The redo of this was much better the other kind of droned on but this one was much cleaner. Only bad news was in trying to make the German voice the sound sounded horrible.
SCRIBBLER SAYS:
Acting - 23
Fit - 16
Originality - 12
Range - 11
Mixing - 6
68
This is a unique approach to the contest. Unfortunately, this is one of those ideas that looks fantastic on paper but in execution, proves to be very difficult to achieve (and and that is why you have 2 version of this perhaps?) Having said that, the "shotgunning" David sounded waaaaay too much like a cheap impersonation of Meatwad from the Aqua Teen Hunger Force series. The gasmask David didn't really sound like someone where a mask but the idea of having an altered voice through some sort of equipment (in this case the gas mask) was a real good idea, just executed in a rather average manner. Third David, full of Roman from Grand Theft Auto IV which wouldn't be a problem normally, it's just that you said exactly what Roman said in the game. Come on! I really have little to say about the fourth Dave, he was my least favorite because he was the most boring character-wise and the clichéd "yelling German" was a bit overdone. The fifth Dave was my favorite, perhaps due to his simplicity or somewhat mopey voice but I'm not sure what it was exactly. Something about the way he talked was very endearing. The twist at the ending... OMG!!! I saw it coming. All in all, nice idea but ultimately disappointing and no, it doesn't even have to do with the fact that you are using a $3 microphone.
STALAGMITE SAYS:
Acting - 27/35
Fit - 22/25
Originality - 12/15
Range 14/15
Mix 7/10
82
Absolutely brilliant!loved the script! Loved the voices. :D needs a little more interaction though..to convince us of the realistic setting... like coughing.. shuffling.. etc...I like that you had some silences to simulate realistic reaction.. but in some cases it was just dead time... just waiting for you to say words, twiddling thumbs. Lol.
August 16, 2009
Author's Response:
Thanks for the judgment, guys!
To correct what Scribbler said about my third Dave, I was shooting for Niko instead of Roman.
