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Jun 26, 2009 | 10:15 AM EDT
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5.9 MB
9 min 56 sec
Score
3.50 / 5.00

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Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.

Score:
Rated 3.50 / 5 stars
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1,268 Plays | 61 Downloads
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Genres:
Voice Acting - Voice Demo
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Author Comments

Here is my entry to the Monthly Voice Acting Contest.
http://www.newgrounds.com /bbs/topic/1068509/1

I got a little carried away when writing the story... it comes in at almost 10 minutes.

Could you tell I spent too much time watching Dexter and reading Frank Miller comics while writing this?

The contest requires:
-there be at least three characters
-no adjustments to your voice (aside from volume)
-the story must talk about someone with a disability
-the story must end with the word turtles

All of the sound effects are from PartnersInRhyme and all the voice work is me.

(There was originally a small part for Janny in the script, but no matter how much falseto I used or how hard I twisted my nards I couldn't get my voice to sound feminine... only creepy)

Reviews


FatKidWitAJetPakFatKidWitAJetPak

Rated 4 / 5 stars

__REVIEW FROM CONTEST__

FINAL SCORE - 78

I thought it was a fantastic story, although far too long which made it a bit boring at some parts. This is one of those classic cop stories, so I deducted one point from originality.. which isnt really that much out of 100. So anyway, the acting was superb and every character sounded different from one another. There were some parts that sounded kind of sketchy when it came to acting, such as the man screaming next to the chainsaw, but since this is 10 minutes long it only makes up 1% of the entire thing. Just a little thing here and there, but all in all it was a great story and I enjoyed it. I even started to feel sorry for the one armed man. I hope to see more from you, Newgrounds needs some serious drama voice actors. TRy contacting SickDeathFiend, he needs some serious drama voice actors such as yourself. You could have cut back on the cursing a bit, but fuck this is fucking newgrounds for you shit fuck cocks. Lol, I always loved turtles. ;) - 88

Thanks for entering the competition! Read below to see what the other judges said.

SCRIBBLER SAYS:

Acting - 18
Fit - 19
Originality - 5
Range - 11
Mixing - 7

60

There are times where swearing isn't necessary but also, there are times where it is quite necessary but even then, it must be done tastefully. The two first F bombs you begin with (not even a minute into the skit) really seemed unnecessary which affected the narrator's voice. Swearing naturally emphasizes emotion and sometimes can even create the character. In this given situation, it was detrimental and very weak. Dominguez sounded more like your natural voice (but I may be wrong) so the interactions between Dominguez and your narrator made the narrator's cadence sound somewhat forced. Perhaps a less "half-way movie trailer guy" voice would have worked better for the narrator. I would have also preferred maybe a bit more acting and slightly less explaining/story-telling. Despite all these flaws, my biggest problem was the acting, though it shined at certain parts (ever so slightly,) overall, the acting felt extremely wooden and this piece would have worked either with higher quality sound effects or none at all. I would have suggested "home-made" sound effects (with your mouth) but obviously you were going for the serious approach here. And one more thing, this was way too long. Several parts could have been cut down and the action could have been amped up, not to the point of satisfying the MTV ADD-riddled generation but so it would be more interesting overall. Also, the ending was completely irrelevant to you story and as I said before, you were going for the whole serious approach so that really ruined it for me.

**Damn this is a long ass review. Thanks Scribbler.: FatKidWitAJetPak***

NAXSTER SAYS:

Acting 28 / 35
Fit 18 / 25
Originality 15 / 15
Range 15 / 15
Mixing 3 / 10

79/100

COMMENTS: Kinda long. Hard to say who was the mental case in this. Plenty of voices.

STALAGMITE SAYS:

Acting - 30/35
Fit - 23/25
Originality - 11/15
Range 11/15
Mix 10/10

- 85

I personally loved dexter... and detected his personality in your voice patterns. :D how geeky. ...its MUCH harder to entertain with pure acting and intelligent writing than comedy and silly voices. Good acting. But weak screaming and not very convincing anger.



rednikaiaGrednikaiaG

Rated 5 / 5 stars

Your dramatic touch was unique in this contest!

I love the dark feel to it, Pawn007------>
Ahh...a Satanic clown show. Classic storyline, staring at the World with cold, dead eyes. There was SO much development in your story. *claps excitedly for your swarthy talent*
"No gang banger wants to admit he got his @ss kicked by a cripple".
Thanks for taking up for little Jamie. Heh heh heh Seriously, all of your phrasing and scenarios are UH-MAY-ZING! I need to go check out your OTHER stuff, now. You've got me curious now!
I wish you the best damn luck in this competition, Pawn007!
You are a truly talented V.A. <3

...............Take care, be good and enforce vengeance.period


Pawn007 responds:

Thank you very much for your review.

I had alot of fun writing and recording this. The Satanic Clown Show is definitely my favorite line xD

Vengeance will definitely be enforced....

...oh yah turtles... xD


StalagmiteStalagmite

Rated 5 / 5 stars

zOMG! dexter series 4!

I personally loved dexter... and detected his personality in your voice patterns. :D how geeky. ...its MUCH harder to entertain with pure acting and intelligent writing than comedy and silly voices. Good acting. But weak screaming and not very convincing anger. good job! good score! =D i see a potential winner. :D


Pawn007 responds:

Thank you very much for taking the time to comment on my work... and to judge this contest.

I prefer drama to comedy... don't get me wrong I love to laugh but I really enjoy the more serious side of animation.

I really know what you mean about the scream... I haven't been able to rid myself of all my inhibitions yet when it comes to recording in my appartment. I have no problem generating the sounds outside, in my car, or at a hall... but it is always stiffled here. (probably is due to being taught from a young age no yelling in the house)

Thanks again.