yea

that was definately different from alot of DnB

Interesting

If you can find s-removal filters, part of the track need it in my opinion, but its a good enough melody, but it goes well repetitive at the end, where it was diverse at the start. The hard part of techno is deciding which of two similar phrases is going to be the intro, and which is after that build. I just ignore the rules of convention and do something different :)
If you want to be a normal techno artist, pick your favourite artists, and try and cover your favourite track, it'll be good practice. If not, listen to things that arent techno and warp them into sounding it. (shameless plug for my kiss me track)

You have talent for writing and using software, so keep practicing.