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Alright few things you need to know.
I'm a one man band, i'm 16 years old.
I know my singing suck penis factory. And
i'm sorry, i'm trying to sing better :(

People before complained about my music not being
punk so i changed it. Besides this song is more pop rock
then pop punk.

And please don't zero bomb. I worked fucking hard,
least you could do is give me some feedback.
Thanks everyone for listening!

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I liked it

Hey man, I really dig this track. Its more indie punk. There are very many different sub genres of punk. And I know exactly how you feel when people attack your music and try to generalize it into a specific genre. And I say fuck em. Ive been working on music since I was your age. Ive gone from rock, to metal, to jazz, to punk. to straight up acoustic. And now Im working on my acoustic project that has elements from every genre Ive ever dipped my fingers into.

I really dig this track, as it is. I dont feel you need to change anything about it. It has a personal raw feel to it. Which I persoanlly look for in music these days, every other band out there sounds like that last one. But this song in particular really takes elements from acts like Taking Back Sunday, Dropkick Murphys hell even Switchfoot. I really dig it man.

oh and I noticed on your profile that you are from Van. Im from Chilliwack man. But if you ever feel you want to jam or share ideas hit me up.
my email is synthetisch@hotmail.com

Good Job Mate!

demented2005 responds:

Thanks man
It's great to get a nice long review.
And im down for jammin, i live in delta, though right on the border to surrey
so chilliwack isn't that far from me.
Thanks again for the comment man, i really appreciate it :)

|m| Rock on. Oh, and a huge summary. Fancy that.

The instruments you use, along with your voice, do have a huge punk-ish sound, but yes, this is a bit too cheery for a punk song. Rock fits it fine though.

Anyway, the song itself, instrument wise, sounds spectacular. From your choice of instruments to your transitions to the minor subtle details like drum rolls and the guitar in the background acting like a baseline are all flawless.

As for the singing? Hey, you're just in that age group where singing is, well, a bitch to put it amusingly. Yet I only noticed a few flaws regardless! My nitpicsk are as follows: at 00:48, you say "Let's go... to a party,[...]" and the party kinda flops on the end there, coming out sounding somewhat like 'pardy'. It just sounds weak on the end there. When you start singing at 1:30, it sounds a lot better. Sure there's some noticeable voice limits, but you really seem to know the limit of your voice (but are probably still just as hoarse afterwards =P) at 2:30, you pull this section off flawlessly. I sneakily suspect you took a lot of attempts to get it perfect, but regardless, it was worth it. You do a great job here.

Onto the lyrics, most of the verses are well timed, but, again "Let's go to a party" seems a bit stretched to jump the space needed. Everything else seems in good standing, though. Just a simple, fun, party song.

All in all, this song is sublime. I wouldn't be surprised to hear this at a rock party or at a small club - supposing you had some dopplegangers to play live, else you might have difficulty around areas like 3:05 no matter how skilled you are. =P
But I digress, this song is definitely something noteworthy. Someone of your skill shouldn't be worrying about some silly grading system on a website, but rather seeing how people (whom like the genre) are reacting to it. And let me tell you, here is one person who's really liking what you're putting out.

demented2005 responds:

That really made my day :)
And everything you pointed out is all true

The party lyric, i want to change but i did so many takes
i just got lazy, I'll go back and fix sometime though :)
and i agree it's pretty bad.

Again thank you very very much =)
I'm really glad someone took the time and effort to write me
a long review, so thanks man.

Not bad

I'd say it was a real song from a band n stuff if you didn't write it. It's not perfect, but it's kinda nice to listen to. I personaly think you did a great job.

Catchy

But there are a few problems. You can hit the notes perfectly, but your voice just doesn't sound good. Nice lyrics, too. What you need is a singer, the rest is fine. WOAH I just heard the na-na's. You can probably do backup singing well enough.
All in all, I like it.

demented2005 responds:

Thanks :)
Yea, I wish i had the voice, things would be so much easier.
Nobody recoginizes people who make the music, but the person
who sings it, well in my eyes anyways. I'll work on the singing
in the mean time i'll find someone to sing instead of me

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Uploaded
Apr 27, 2009
4:04 PM EDT
Genre
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6.4 MB
3 min 31 sec

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