Score: 6
"Really beautiful melody, but needs the performance"
date: April 11, 2009
Neat little production you got going here. I really like the chordprogression and the melody that comes out.
The biggest problem I have with the song though is that it's in a constant tempo from the beginning to the end, it feels like you're in an eternal verse of some kind, never doing any offshoots into a refrain or similar.
The second thing I want to address is dynamics. I know you use a soundfont in the creation of this, which may not support velocity(dynamics) for every single note but you should always think about each note and the feeling you want to express in every single one of them, especially with piano and guitar, or it will sound kind of static and non-dynamic.
This song is pretty much straight, I can hear that you use some kind of abss in the background, but the instrumental part of this song never changes, as does never the tempo or flow. My suggestion is to orchestralize it a bit. That way you can steer the flow much better and even vary some instruments from time to time. It's a beautiful piece, it really is, but you need a more solid performance of it to bring the feelings out more. It's really hard to put a value into this song, and points are really useless on newgrounds anyway, as long as these 0 voters exists. And I assume you value the constructive critiscism more than a value on your song so ^^
April 11, 2009
Author's Response:
I see what ya mean. I'm actually selling some old equipment so I can get a electro-nylon guitar, so that I can actually play this. The way I play it sounds different than a crappy soundfont, so maybe when I get the recording I'll shoot you a pm.
I really appreciate your critique on my songs, especially this song. I agree, some parts definatly need changed up.
Thanks for the review!
