So you also PMed Bjra? :P
I totally agree with Bjra that you need to put a lot of time in your music to become good. And of course you need talent too, but i think you have that.
What's with that sudden change at 01:28? :P
I think i liked the 2nd part better. You should really try to get some good sounding VST's, i recommend Edirol (it's not free).
Anyway, this is a pretty good song, but it could be better.
9/10
5/5
MH16