getting there...
Better than that heavy metal attempt. That weird, glitchy beat that comes in like twice in the whole song is sweet but that smelly TS404 preset that plays through the entire time and that obnoxious laser sound (.syn preset?) are annoying.
The structure is still is haphazard at best. Not in a sort of ordered chaos way, either. It's like you just made all these seperate patterns and then tried different combinations of them without any real rhyme or reason. I'm not sure whether you thoughtfully wrote the riffs around the bass progression or vice versa or at all. At least most of them sound reasonably tuneful.
It's clear you're improving, I'll give you that much. I still think you should go and listen to a lot of music and study the techniques used, brush up on music theory, etc... Find some zipped FL project files and have a look at how other people structure their songs. Hell, I'll even send you some of my FL files if you want them.
You don't have to copy anyone verbatim but it will help you with ideas to give your works a more clarified direction.