Hmm
I think your music, like yourself, has the urge to be moving, but for some reason isn't. Kind of seems like the whole thing is sleeping, waiting to build up, but never getting anywhere. You've got some good bass there, but there's nothing to fill out the sound spectrum or resolve the bass, really repetitive too- but--
It's good that you can express yourself through music. Keep doing that and you'll get a lot of good results. Practice too, because the easier it is for you to transfer what you've got in your head onto the computer, the better it will come out. Sometimes you're even able to resolve your conflicts with the music, which is especially cool to listen to.
In short, keep it up, you're not quite there.