not shabby

like the guys before me said, the cluster chords at the beginning and end had too much overtone, try using a different instrument that will give less dissonance, even with a dissonant chord such as a piano or even choir. The solo instrument in the bulk of the song didnt seem to go well with the rest of the piece to be honest

Cluster Chords

While I can understand what you're trying to convey, the cluster chords at the beggining are ear piercing and hold no dissonance. The overtones cause so many problems in this instance. You should practice creating organic melodies. I am noticing people have been creating synthesis or using sounds that are not intended to go togethor (Artificial/Organic sounds vs Artificial/Organic melodic content).

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its starts pretty good then seems to die
in the middle its seems the song will pick up but does not
jumps around to much at the end.

its done well but too choppy