Score: 10
"not a bad start"
date: December 13, 2008
You know, for a start, it's not very bad at all. Most of the times artists (who are usually uber famous later) starting off are... worse than crappy. So, this is the first time you've ever actually used FL for anything? Wow.
To the review: the ambience background is really good, and the bass is ever present, in my opinion. However, the synth that comes in at :21 sounds too bizarre: by that I mean, is there any way to make it not sound so choppy at the end? The organ-like sound that comes in at around :37 is okay, but doesn't really support the theme of the song, unity-wise. I have to say, the :50 second instrument (short as it is) doesn't really either: it feels kind of like a carnival, the way you have the notes set up.
However, it is, I'll say it again- really good as a debut. You just need a little more practice when it comes to unity, and you'll be on your way. I'll be watching your stuff, Chaob! Keep up the good stuff.
December 13, 2008
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for taking the time to review this piece. I have just begun working on my next song and will keep in mind what you have said. I agree there wasn't much for unity in there, I had too many ideas pulling it in different directions I guess.
Thanks again for the constructive review!
