Score: 6
"And my, what a fierce Andriod Wizard you are."
date: October 17, 2008
Ya know, you've actually got some decent potential there, and the song could really work with a bit of tweaking like Arkas said. I think one of the main things that kinda distracts from the piece are your drums patterns, although I'm not sure if you purposely intended to have a major contrast between the styles of your instruments (The part where everything falls silent and then a different drum pattern comes up in around 30 sec. definitely made me laugh, in a good way).
Hope you end up sticking with these things. I'd like to see how your future creations turn out.