Over the past two days I wrote this much of this major song that I have been working on, and while it is far from being done (the final thing might be well over 10 minutes, I guarantee it.) I feel it was necessary to share with the community what I have so far, since this place seems to be much more accepting of heavy metal than the community over at Sheezy Art. Hopefully this should gain some attention and hopefully some feed back and criticisms. Before anyone says it, yes I will need vocals for this song, I will be doing my own, but if someone wants to collaborate with me on them I'd be more than happy to send it over once I'm finished with my vocals (we can work it out via PM or Email who will take which parts and how it will be structured)
Anyways, hope you all enjoy and I look forward to working with anyone who would like to lay down vox for this! \mm/
Also, RETARDS READ THIS:
don't BLAM the crap out of this just because you're a faggot, go suck your own dick somewhere away from me and my work. I don't know what kind of grudge you hold against me and my work, but don't bring it here douchebags
Nice
So this was some nice sound here you have some good rythem on this one and some really good instraments that work well together like the drums and guitar all came together we'll so keep doing what you do here it's great stuff
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More mixture of the instraments would be nice
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The intro is awesome
Same with the rest
fat-nastic
this is really good... some good variety in the rhythm and melody... drums also work pretty well to the guitar...
i'll second what was said below... needs an intro that does this song justice... and this will be killer once the vox kick in. Any takers yet?
check out my latest if you have the chance. I sometimes do vox collabs but I can't promise anything as I have a lot going on.
Intriguing
Really good so far. I found myself playing along on my keyboard, it has great potential for additional voices. Even by itself, I think it can stand alone. The different sections can really back up a verbal story or message. What you've written so far calls certain emotions and depending on what you say vocally will define them. It's very versatile, I can already feel anger, hope, empowerment, even tragic just from the instruments, the overall tone will eventually be defined by the lyric. I just hope you can write an equally intriguing story for lyrics to complement the music.
I know it's not final but it needs an intro, those two bars of eighth notes aren't cut'n it for me. The transitions are okay so far. I'm assuming there will be some expansion on some of the sections. I'm also interested to hear how your going to close this.
As good as it's sounds now, it's still far from finished, I think this is something you'll have to dedicate some serious time to. All you can do is work on it until you've reached satisfaction with the piece. If your going to share the development of this with us on this web site, then please let me know when you post another submission. I would really love to hear how this evolves into a finished composition. I wish you good luck and thanks for sharing.
Nicely done
This is some really nice work, specially for a "demo".
This has a really nice feel to it and is played in a way to where a bunch of different voice types could do the vocals for the song. It leads up and changes really well too. The chugging of the guitar sounds really good to. Some sick little soloing was going on in one part too. Props for that cause it was really good.
Keep up the work, hope to hear more.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.
DPK4 
