Not Bad

Your industrial synth in the beginning is alright, it gets too repetive for the whole song, it would be nice if you had it and built it up with some snares into your dreamy trancey synth ---

by the way your melody is good, but some notes are off key listen carefully if you reopen the file and try to make them flow nicely...it may sound right but try other notes and you might get something much better. Also use your standard trance 4 Kick Pattern. Try equing the kick as well (if you have fl, for starters add a Parametic EQ 2 - preset kick and play with it) -- Your on the right track, just not there yet. Gj