The first 18 seconds

were awesome, but then it does get random. If you kept it going from there instead of going all crazy this track would be amazing. I like the little sound thing you used right at 0:16. It sounds like it's leading into an epic chorus. You should work with that and see what comes out of it, maybe making it the lead.

Interesting

Very freaky choice of instruments, I found it to be very psychedelic. At the beginning, I thought you were going for a classical-like heavy song, you already had me wondering on the choirs and really finished me off with the L/R panned hi-hats at the end. This is more of an experimental piece, if you ask me, and it was really interesting listening to it! Good work, just keep on building upon this and it will turn out to be a great song!

Btw, if you have the time, check out my latest VG submission, you might like it!

Good start

seems like a good start for a track, altrough its far from finished. Like the play that you have done with the drum, but it could get more adventurous, for sure one to work out if you ask me ;)