Score: 7
"Not bad"
date: June 28, 2008
The song itself isn't bad (nice effects are present, "rrr" is nice ;)) but the problem is, it doesn't "catch" with anything. Maybe try to make a song to flow so that we could feel that song is a whole thing, not just loop-based composition. For example, that "church effect", it starts too suddenly, then it ends too suddenly. I hope you understood what I meant ;)
I can give you idea for the next song. Try to make something ambient'al. With piano or so... And by that I mean use as little instruments as you can. Be sure that every single note is needed - if not, don't use it.
Something like that.
Good luck, and don't give up!