Here's another song I wrote. I wrote this song after the other songs seemed to do well. So, this one was NOT done in Iraq. Unfortunately, I still don't have any recording equipment, nor do I have a music editor. However, I do plan on looking some up online this weekend and possibly ordering a few things. I still haven't had any vocal training, never been in a choir in highschool much less college or anything like that. I apologize for the vibration of the guitar that occurs from time to time. But, like i've said before, i'm using sound recorder and the microphone built into my laptop, so I do a few takes, and whichever is the best, I use. I'm a really big fan of songs that tell stories, or at least that seems to be what i've done so far. As opposed to writing a song about the things you hate in the world or stuff to that nature. If you like this, be sure to check out my other songs! Reviews are appreciated, good, bad, ugly, just be sure to be tactful. By that I mean reviews that say "you suck." Because that doesn't really help me, and this is the whole reason I'm posting these songs is to get good/bad criticism. "you suck" basically tells me that you have a brain the size of a pea, and your review won't be taken seriously. Anywho, Thanks for Listening and standby for more!!
Okay
Nice lyrics but the guitar is fairly stoic. I most cases if the melody is decent it wouldn't matter. In this case however your voice is very plain with very little range and poor dynamics. I would recommend daily vocal exercises and push your limits often. Your are on key which is a plus you just sound like you are running out of air. All in all it shows promise.
Great
this is short because my cat is in the way but the song was great and i really liked it. I've been listening to some rap recently so this was a nice relaxing song
Thanks for taking the time to review. It's good to not stick to one genre. Don't get me wrong, i enjoy rap too, but too much of anything can get boring.
very nice
very good it was a pretty well made song even for a crappy laptop microphone
k umm ure voice kinda trembles some times on the high notes i recommend you leave those alone and have your girlfriend to help you with them
also see if you can organize people who play other instruments into a band
just a thought
Yeah, don't have a girlfriend, but I think if i separate the tracks on an audio program, I should be able to put more focus in those areas. As far as other instruments, I have a couple of them laying around, and I can always add them as different tracks once I get the right software. So it's all in the works, these first few songs were kind of a test to see if it was worthwhile to keep pursuing this little hobby i've got going. And because of the great responses from listeners like yourself, i do believe i'll start investing in better equipment and software. Thanks for the reviews
Nice Work
You got something going here. I'd say keep at it.
I'm not an expert by any means. I'm still trying to teach myself guitar as it is.
Only thing I find distracting is the pauses after each verse. Other than that, keep playing!
Thanks for posting.
Thanks, wasn't sure about this song, haven't gotten much response from it since I released it. You keep goin on the guitar man. I've had a lot of people try to ask me to teach them how to play, and it got to the point where I tell them they have to WANT to play. Go to www.ultimate-guitar.com for some excellent tabs and some really good free lessons. You could also youtube it, not sure if there's much there, but I wouldn't doubt it. Anyway, thanks for the review!
awesome
i like this song. but again (like special day) i think you could add a violin part or something for some parts of this song. but it's still a pretty cool song.
I do have a violin, just haven't got around to learning how to play it. lol, It's alot harder to self teach the violin than it is the guitar. gosh, i think i've said this already. Anyway, i think if i get a fretboard for the violin it will be a lot easier to learn. Sorry If I repeated myself. Thanks for the review!
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.
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