This was tough to write, I couldn't think of a good ending (I improvised actually), and Audacity kept freezing.
LYRICS:
I am the voice of your thoughts
I am the voice that makes you stay awake
You cannot rest with me here
You cannot live without me here
I am your shining destiny
I am your hellish fate
Stay awhile and be destroyed
Leave now and face the fire
(RANDOM SCREAMING)
Any suggestions? This probably still isn't the final version.
OH my god.
What the fuck is this shit? As if the lyric talent isn't bad enough... You fucking have the worst guitar talents I've ever heard. And in between the choruses, you went "Hyaaan Hyaahh BWAAAAAH" You cant do death metal worth your life, 1. Acoustics. 2. Your voice is too light to do it.
I know I suck, and obvious everyone else knows it. How about some CONSTRUCTIVE criticism? And I've been working on my vocals and guitar skills, so that I won't suck on my next song (I hope).
pitifull
no guitar talent, no good vocals. come on, you couldnt have possibly thought that was good man. wats up you have try to record better, wtf is up with that mike, it was all scratchy seriosly? cmon man this gets a zero
I'm just learning guitar, so I'm sorry if there's no incredible playing here, I do with what I have. As for vocals, this is a 14-year-old who's voice is still changing, it's hard to pull off excellent vocals, especially when it comes to death growls. If you meant the lyrics, then go listen to your shitty hip-hop, this is death-metal lyrics.
As for the mic, I don't have amazing studio-quality equipment, don't rate the song over sound quality, I can't help it.
I have a feeling that you don't like this style of music, judging by the hip-hop bullshit on your profile. Don't listen to it if you don't like the musical style.
lmfao
you sound exactly like me when I was twelve. This was fucking hilarious though. throw some drums in there. even if its just midi drums, or you banging pencils on a table. now THAT would add some comedic value.
I'm fourteen.
And I'll add drums.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.
Stickfire 
