Score: 5
"alextheDJ! wassup?"
date: June 8, 2008
Slow start, liking it though. Piano, that is a nice touch. Everything seems to go together, but it is just taking to long to build. ahh! here is the beat. it is a little generic. Now the ghostly sounds from the beginning are gone, im at 1:46. Nice synth at 1:50, but it is a little generic itself. Now the song is getting a bit repetitivie. The bass is starting to hurt my ears a bit, but my volume might just be too loud. Now it is only piano and it is getting filtered a lot. that doesn't seem necessary. And were back with the same beat, but a new synth. sounds like laughter at 3:48, which sounds nice. this song is just a little to repetitive.
Long song, but it sounds cool.
well here is the break Down:
You got talent, you just need to work on organizing it and not trying to over play it. There is a good song with this idea here, it is just stretched out to 4:37 when it could be a lot better somewhere around 2 minutes. Listen to professional music a bit more, take note of how they use teh same mechanics you have just in ways to compliment each other. 1 point for sounds, 2 points for bass, 1 point for instruments well used, 2 points for beat. and 3 points for synths. but this is deathly repetitive, i have to take off 4 points for that.
Good effort, just needs more structuring. you can do it!
June 8, 2008
Author's Response:
Now THAT'S constructive criticism! I really appreciate that! Very nice suggestions and criticism. I will admit that this is really repetitive. I got lazy with the drum sound being the same and also the sounds from the beginning being played over and over. This is definitely not my best work. I have this strange idea that my songs need to be long... I don't know why. I did think that this was a cool drum sound. I spent a while on it and that's why I got lazy with it. I brought back the reece because I like it and I just learned how to make one but I think next time I'll leave it out. I thought the piano sound was cool, but, again, I used it waaaay too much. I'll take your advice on listening to pro stuff and gettin a feel for it. I'm still trying to make that perfect drum n bass drum sequence... I really appreciate you believing in me and encouraging me. That's what keeps me goin :)
Anyway, I'm probably getting repeditive in this response! lol