Score: 8
"This is what is known as Great Success!"
date: May 28, 2008
Alright, first off, name it 'Rugged Rainbow'. It's pretty crazy, no doubt, but I can still feel what it's all about. Don't give up on it, not when you've already done so much. Let's see... I really like what you have so far, up to the last few seconds which sound incomplete and probably are. I guess to keep going forward I would just ask you to keep mixing up the instrumentation. You could pretty much use anything at this point, like acoustic guitar? Bass has already been addressed; I'd just like more of that. Maybe a vocalist?
Get a really low alto to sing this:
Dancing in the rain, water doesn't stain
Let the light surround me, onto the refrain
Wrestle with a cloud, falling down below
All you get is a rugged rainbow
It'll be a winner, I promise.
May 31, 2008
Author's Response:
Hey, Patrick! Those are wonderful lyrics. Although I can't really see them fitting into this particular song, there's a high chance I might use them in another song. It's just that I can't seem to merge them together. If you are able to record yourself saying/singing the lyrics, it'd be helpful if you can send it to me, just so I can get how you're seeing it.
You're right.. I might add some acoustic guitar in the middle. That'd go.
Anyway, I'm really glad you liked it :D
Two super reviews have got me hyped!
Now I'm probably going to do some major work on it this week..hopefully finish it.