Score: 0
"Raving Mad-Critique 1"
date: October 14, 2009
Hello, I know that you said listen to both parts (which I have) but I will be writing on both so I can give off more in depth feedback.
First of all, I must imply that you rename this "Raving Mad" because I literally think this does belong at a rave. The beat and bass for most of the song are strong and loud, which for this piece goes along with the synths and the electrical instruments well.
I enjoyed the creativity of this piece, bits and pieces here and there (a fine example is the music box chime during 3:26 and beyond) it made the piece as a whole unique, giving it a new style compared to the original. However, there seems at sometimes too MUCH of a good thing at some parts. In example, the distortion of the guitar around :36 hurt my ears a bit and seemed to dull out a lot of the other instruments. Also, since most of the music was electric or synth, some parts blended in too well, making it hard to distinguish harmony and melody.
I loved the transitions of Part 1 to Part 2 at 2:35, it was short but it seemed to slide along very smoothly.
Part 1 as a whole was extraordinary, I liked the way the intro was played and accustomed with the beginning of the actual song. Correct me if I'm wrong, but it also seemed like a heart beat near :19 and lasting for a couple of seconds, that blended in well and actually helped show tone of the piece and it's intensity. You seemed very accurate with the speed of the piece as well; starting off the piece nice and slow and then leading it up to intense.
Part 2 also was extraordinary, as mentioned before, the piece from P1 slid right into it without a beat, keeping me with the rhythm. A few parts blended in here and there during the part but it still was phoenominal. It also kept it's accuracy from the original; being light and bouncy, yet dark and emotional at the same time.
Little things that I would suggest is to out-branch to a few more style of instrument, or maybe even choir to avoid over-blending the sounds together.
Little things aside, this was a simply beautiful piece.
I will not post a score on this review but will put it on my next review on your piece. Please do not think I'm giving you a (0) for as I can see, you don't deserve anything less than 9. And that's being critical!
Keep up the great work!
~CMB
