Pretty good.

The guy below was a bit mean with his score, but was quite truthful with his review. This would make for a good menu-ish loop.
And the vocalist held that "shriek" quite a while. My compliments.

And, yes. Stay metal!
\m/ (^^) \m/

Im going to write this as I listen to the song.

Intro:

Good EQ, what is that a wind sample? Oh wait its a little bassy I think. The guitar fill in doesn't blend too well to the main riff.

Solo part thing:

The drums have not changed a bit. cmon man, fill it in, we need drum fills

oh wait there was 1 drum fill I heard to far,

The "drummer" is only using 1 hand technically. thats not metal.

Final opinion:

The main guitar riff looped the entire time, there was a small solo. The drums looped and there was the same drum fill 2-3 times I think.

Now ask yourself:
Is this something you would want to write?

If the answer is yes then keep doing it, and good luck progressing as a musician.

No?

Well hell, try harder. Practice makes perfect. Compose the best damn metal symphony you've ever heard.

It needs drums that change.

It needs riffs that change.

Even if there aren't vocals it needs a chorus, bridges, solos, melody, etc.. etc..etcc..

that song made me feel like I fell asleep after watching a DVD and the menu music kept playing over and over again. and I fucking hate that.

Good luck, keep it up.