Interesting

Haha ok i got a good laugh from this, it was pretty amusing, the writing i thought could have been better, and maybe some slight more animation but i guess this is the art portal so its notbad i suppose, and seems like you have alot of thse guinipig, and they are amusing and the art work is simple yet nifty, so you do have something here, hope to see more soon untill then good luck.

~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
As some sort of improvment, not sure but i did mention more animation and possibly some differant font writing of some sort.