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Not sure why you judged the origional artist so harshly when the criticisms you gave are equelly shared between you both, although i will admit that your art has improved compared to older pieces, the waves are probably what stand out the most to me although there is a bit of an issue where perspective is concerned. The items in the forground suggest that the viewer is looking down at a slight tilt at the individual in the water yet the waves further back don't feel as though they're getting further away, they end up looking like they're on the same plain as the waves in the foreground. It ends up taking alot of depth out of the scene and ends up looking flat overall which also takes away from how well the props in the scene are coloured.
Personally i would made the individual in the water face towards the hand that is reaching down and have her arm reaching for it as opposed to the awkward manner of trying to force it into an awkward direction, the parallel of the two hands both being viewed in the same pose feels kind of boring as opposed to having them in different poses to vary up what the viewer is seeing. The hole in the hand of christ reaching down should be made smaller than it it currently is if you're not going to realistically portray a wound of that diameter.
As far as symbolism is concerned i'm not really sure what the phone, bottle, bucket and can are meant to represent without having to read the description of the piece. The piece needs to be more prominent with how it portrays its message to the viewer, from my perspective i only knew what certain elements were meant to represent after reading the description which means it isn't clear enough from looking at the image alone. The way you describe physical abuse to being an alcoholic gives off mixed messages seeing as although it is meant to represent a parallel between the way you felt in that moment it tends to also give the message that you yourself are an alcoholic or your abuse was caused by someone who was.
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As far as the artpiece this was inspired by i'm not sure if your description is justified in the way that you describe it, your critique of it did seem to have a condescending air about it considering the similarity between your skill levels. Saying "it's not striking and it's not artistically competent" tends to be more insulting than helpful which is probably why he replied to your critique in such a negative manner, any helpful critiques beyond that point go out of the window due to the way you decided to brand his artistic expression as "incompetent".
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Sweet Sacrament of rest,
ark from the ocean's roar,
within thy shelter blest
soon may we reach the shore;
save us, for still the tempest raves,
save, lest we sink beneath the waves:
sweet Sacrament of rest.
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Doing this as something very personal. The original, which led me to do this, can be found here:
http://www.newgrounds.com/art/view/profa21/dark-side-of-the-moon
The subject... no, the whole drawing, takes me out of my comfort zone. I did this for three reasons:
1) To demonstrate what the original might look like with better anatomical knowledge and shading,
2) To unburden,
3) To rebel.
I am drawing this as an abuse survivor. Parental, state-sanctioned, teacher-sanctioned, societal... it's all there; I still bear the scars. And yet, I am of the school of thought that believes that I cannot just hide my suffering with signposts. I cannot hide that my prayer, my artwork and my music are all laboured and painful. So, I might as well let it go through the art. I am no alcoholic, but the effects of having been beaten day in, day out as a child feel about the same. A withdrawal into self-loathing and everything that comes with it.
This style of artwork, if you want to call it that, is also something I've not done in a while. I've always wanted to not hide behind the curtain that is bold, thick outlines. With outlines, I could colour in comfort. Here, even comfort melts away. It's uncomfortable, not just because of the subject matter. Colouring this was an exercise in patience, which I have little of. And yet, I love drawing and colouring. It was painful.
I am doing this as rebellion against anyone who asks for advice on how to improve, and then fucking dismisses it and belittles people for giving them said advice. Sure, my previous drawings look anime-like. Maybe, so does this one. But do I care? Quite frankly, no. I have studied, and still am studying, the finer details of anatomy and probably still don't get things right. But every artist is still gonna be worried about those things. At least I'm trying, unlike a certain few other people we know.
My friend, you have ALWAYS branded my artistic expression as "incompetent," so you're one to talk, especially about being condescending. I marked it helpful because at least I can accept criticism about what to do where in the piece, which is more than can be said for you, or him.
You wanted to literally unfriend me when I told you I wasn't a fan of your art style. You wanted to condescend me for my ability to forgive those who had hurt me the most. Let it be known for all of Newgrounds to see!
The finger is curving to the other side a little and the face looks like something out of a curios George book !!! The shading is very good along with the water, but thanks for the shot out and copying my idea. It's flattering. I'm gonna do a paint style one next, and i will show you art. Be blessed
About the idea, anytime. I did say I loved the original so much. See what you come up with next.
Just whatever you do, take that Deviantart mentality out of your head.
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