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the 4th page of my not yet finished comic book.

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A fantastic idea for a comic

I like that this was in black and white Well this was A fantastic idea for a comic you really make it work from top to bottom and the art style is very impressive with some added detail, so props to you on an amazing comic style I could see you making even more like this one and hope you do soon.

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Good

The background is missing! EEEK!!!

Great character art though!

TheOmiyan responds:

I got a 9. . . awesome!

Feels empty

Try adding simple backgrounds if it wouldn't be too much trouble. Also dialog could use some work.

hmmm....

Well it's pretty well done, the proportion's fairly accurate (assuming they're kids)... The placement of the eyes and such seems a bit off... especially the kid in the first scene, his facial features make it look like you were attempting a realistic rendition, not manga. It's still pretty good, but keep drawing, and use human analogs, you'll draw even better...
As for the dialogue... it's not that interesting or comprehensive... xc But I score mainly on the art...

hmmm not bad

but ur missing the girls back hair its really large so u should be able to see it n u lack any background so there standing in a random white nothingness god shading tho but try n do a lil transistion even if its just a lil when doing the full on blacck ohhh n not bad dialog its more natural than most noob comics

TheOmiyan responds:

This page is'nt actualy done it obviously needs some fixing up, but thanks for being honest

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Uploaded
Aug 19, 2009
8:01 PM EDT
Category
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