Author's Comments
So another picture for you people to vote, comment and well... i dont know what do really... but anway... my first adult rated picture... *woot*... now as allways... i dont want silly comments saying *omg boobs!* beacuse thats not going to help me improve... if you see anything wrong with it... pm me or leave a comment... so far i want to work on the face a bit more and possibly add a few more details... as for the background... its a sneak peak of my sketch book tour piece... so there :P...
so... what do you think?
The People Have Spoken
Average Score: 8.9 / 10
she kinda looks like she has scoliosis, but other that that, great job. love the stars!
Author's Response:
oh dear... that doesnt sound good :S... better make sure my other pictures dont have the same effect then :P
Looks really nicely done, the face seems a tad slanted but other than that it looks great.
Author's Response:
yeah... from all the reviews im getting a pritty good idea to what i need to work on... thanks for the review :3
great idea and work. i love the ninja stars
Author's Response:
thank you very much for your comment :3
keep working on it a little odd looking though but still i like plus sexy lookin
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please write your review with proper grammer... or at least with "," in it so you break it up... if you just read it as it stands it makes no sence what so ever...
but thats for your review non the less :3
I think her boobs are down a bit low but its still hot! I just gotta ask, why has she got a ninja star in her mouth?
Author's Response:
shes level 34!!!... what level is 34?... ninja stars!?... oh my... :P
I love it! but you need to work on proportions, such as the left arm, right leg, back, and placement of boobs. The over all look of it is grat though. Keep it up!
Author's Response:
will do, thanks for the review
Very skillful drawings, everything looks quite good exept for her left arm, it looks very out of sync with the rest of her body and I think it's put too much infront of her body for it to look good. Not that it looks bad or anything but thats just what I think. Try and compare the left arm with the right one and you'll see the right one is very smoothly done and near perfect, but the right one doesn't look like it fit into the picture, it just looks like a layer ontop of it.
Other than that, it is nice to see a good looking picture every now and then on the art portal.
Nice work.
Author's Response:
why thank you... alot of people are pointing this out... it seems to be a big problem... one im looking into fixxing... athough its mostly on the same layer :P... il try and sort it out with my next update :3
Nice. Now tell me. Why is it named "Lvl 34"?
Author's Response:
well... in newgrounds... level 34 is three lots of ninja stars... its for the newgrounds level collab... in the art fourm... :3
It's really a nice job! Maybe you could give her a sexy hair style, but otherwise you're pretty talented.
Author's Response:
sexy hair style?... like what?... just out of bed hairstyle?... next time i get my hair cut im asking for the "sexy hair style" and see what i get... :S
I HAVE NEVER SEEN BREASTS BEFORE! I never knew what was under womens shirts... i like to stay in my basement and usually i sometimes play solitaire. A very classy game...
But really Its pretty good. I really like the background. The girl herself is nothing too stunning... Hot? yes! but i think there are somethings like a little colar bone or signs of her having hips... well... thats about all.
Author's Response:
lol, but yeah i can see what you are getting at.. thanks for pointing that out to me... :3
might get a tatto of that on my arm
Author's Response:
really? you must be a crazy person to do that!
Who sees that shes only got one arm? Theres the left arm, and theres no showing of the right arm. Other then that, its pretty good.
Author's Response:
you do know that she could quite easly hide her arm behind her body?... yes?
Hi my medals-friend, I must say I really like your drawings, those with major arguments like this... well even more XD
I like how you paint the breasts and the use of light, also like the "strange" pose of the girl, the soft curves... oh sure, I like the shurikens!
A bottom note, is brilliant how yout put your name in the background, very well done... I hope to see other NG levels designed by you!
Author's Response:
i may have more level drawings in the works... who knows :P... thanks for the review :P
i wana rape her ass
and pussy
setul down dick
Author's Response:
... most useless review yet
very good !
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hello?
it reminds me of her!!! <3 it seems erotic yet enticing at the same time...bored _-_ yea...damn...i miss her already /:
improvements:
1.make the breasts to where they don't sag like an old lady.
2.you should add hands, perhaps put it to where she hangs her index finger on the shuriken or something like that to where it makes it look sexier...
3.add more back to the bone!!! XD it looks like she broke her back just by trying to pose for this picture!!! XP
overall i give this an 8 because it's symmetrical either way!!! XD do better next time...ok?! X3
Author's Response:
i will do my better next time then :(... im sorry i un able to draw :P, thanks for the review :3
It's alright, but it could use some improvement. I'm sure this has been brought up in the other reviews but:
Her face looks flat to me, I'm not sure if it's just the nose or if the shoulder is messing with the perspective as well. The shoulder there does need to be fixed though, maybe arch it back instead of where it's at.
The breasts hang a bit low, almost like a 40 year old with a boob job. I think bringing them up would make them look perkier, which would fit for how old the face looks.
The way her back bends kind of makes her look... broken. I think the angle there should be softened up, maybe just add a little bit more flesh there. The star on her left boob looks right on, but the other two could use a little bit of work.
The background is pretty cool! Can't wait to see the other stuff that goes with that lol, I like it!
Hopefully you find something useful in my review. I'm off to go look at more of your work!
Author's Response:
thanks for the indepth review... it was very inlighting... its good to see alot of people picking up the same stuff so when i do my next piece it should be 100% better and not have the same flaws... thanks for the review... :3
Huh, silly faggot what you going to do about that you ass
Author's Response:
mark it as abusive?
i love this,i really do,wait,l sound like some perv,its really good quality,and really hot,wouldnt the shuriken cut her lips though,that part is making it a bit eerie,i mean,no matter how cool it is,i just cant help think that its gonna slice her mouth open,well,im done with this review,i have to go and cry now
Author's Response:
lets asume she is biteing the metal with her teeth, her lips are just resting on it... after all... they arent that sharp are they?... *presses with fingers*... your right... they are sharp...
Its really good when you say it the face can use a tad bit of work but its still good
Author's Response:
thanks for the review :3
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reminds meh of mah Girlfreind..................
and naruto ......................................................
Now im going to get a drunkin girl and Rap3 her and maybe a a sex japanse ninja that has a F cup and a huge @$$ so thx u for getting rid of mah virginaty out lolz
seriously i wills ^_^
Author's Response:
wtf?... try posting comments when your sobber next time...
omg boobs!
Author's Response:
i see what you did there...
Hopefully I wont repeat the reviews below. I found more to point out, but someone already pointed that out for you.
Add some hands. At the moment you cant see them, some might think you're hiding them because you simply can't draw them. Even if they're hard to draw you should practice. Same would go for the legs. But I find them a bit properly cut if you will. The left thigh seem to collide with the hip, somehow...?
Getting some reference for her spine, as the current one look a bit twisted. I also find her midsection/lower body to be to thin. I believe making her back a more gentle curve from around the middle of her top to her thong would improve the back a lot.
The shurikens look like they could need some changes. I also find her right boob, the one to the left, to be a bit bigger than the other one. Which would be ok if it was seen from the front, as breasts are not 100% symetric. But because of the perspective it should be smaller than the other one if they were even. Seeing as it is placed further away from the view.
Any help?
Author's Response:
im working on my hands... so yeah... i tend not to draw them... with the legs i just tend to cut them out beacuse they take up alot of room most of the time... but il keep it in mind... yeah i should use references more... i tend to just go with it, still trying to get a style of my own... so im playing around with lines and stuff... as for the bigger boob, i never really payed that much attention to them to be honest :P... i see what your saying... and of course... most likey one of the most usefull review for this picture...
very sexy and ninjaish..... but i dont like how the arm looks like a snap on peice.
Author's Response:
its the new and improved sexy pin up... now with pin on arms!!!... yeah i see what your saying, i did mess around with it untill i gave up trying to fix it... i should really make it blend it instead of a *snap of arm*.. :P
its nice but arent her boob a lillte low placed ? stil very nice:)
Author's Response:
i have noticed this and may give her a bit of a nip and tuck.. however thats alot of money these days and i dont know if i can afford it on a piece of paper :S
Why exactly is it rated adult if it just shows breasts? Is it the shuriken on the nipples?
Author's Response:
if i rated it adult... then there wouldnt be any problems where as if i made it mature... i might have an issue, and yes... this is the person who has level 34 as their user level...
TIT TAZZLERS
Author's Response:
did you even read my comment?
I'd milk this picture for what it's worth.
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do i sence a pun here?
The nose to me sticks out the most on the drawing. It looks a little plain As long as being a bit too far up the face, leaving a bit of negative space. Its like there should be something there, but I can't really think of anything to put there. The waist bothers me as well. I know you were trying to give it a curved and forward thrust type motion, but it seems to come off as if she broke her waist, and is contorting herself upwards. Hope this helps!
Author's Response:
i can see what your going on about with the waist... the face is still something im thinking of working on... but yes this is helpfull to me... thanks for the review...
You should make more of these man. they don't need to be pornographic but just use the Ng level icons that'd be sweet to see what you can come up with.
Author's Response:
im currently making a level 42 picture of a female knight... :3
The facial structure in general seems a bit off, but can be excused as your own artistic style. Something about the eye and nose placement seems off thanks to the bone structure on the right side of the face.
Both shoulders are not positioned in the right perspective. The right shoulder is protruding towards the chest. Shifting this back a bit would help. The left shoulder also needs to be spaced backwards. It also seems to be too "fat" on the shoulder itself in comparison to her body as a whole.
The breasts seem to be hanging too low. She has nearly a full head length between her chin and start of her cleavage.
Thanks to the breast placement, it seems like her body caves inwards around the end of her ribcage. I doubt a human spine bends in that deep. That whole effect seems to ruin her midsection. The rest of her body has soft curves, but here there are sharp lines. Reposition the breasts and soften the lines on the midsection [as well as reduce the sharp curve of the spine] and you're golden.
Don't get me wrong. The breasts are drawn well, the legs look really nice, the shuriken add a nice flair to it all, and the backdrop with your camouflaged name is just awesome. I would suggest a wireframe sketch first to get the proportions down, then the rest will fall into place.
Author's Response:
thank you for a detailed and well layed out review... this is by the the most helpfull review i have gotten about this picture so far... i have listed your views and agree with them all... there was a few things i knew already like the brests been to far down... but you have pointed out things i missed and looking back i can see more clearing now having someone elses view on it... when i have the time i shall correct these mistakes and hopefully produce a better quality image overall... thank you for your time for responding to it... :3
Dude you really make some amazing babe art
Author's Response:
why thank you... but please try to help me improve at the same time... ;)
its looks like you put her in shiny oil
and left her to dried
Author's Response:
im working on lighting and getting a better effect with it... il try make future ones more realistic for you...
No doubt she is a sexy beast! Only thing i dislike is the arm kinda, it looks kinda odd. I think this pic will have alot of views, the adult rated one I made got over
20 000 views, sex sells :D!
Author's Response:
yeah im going to try correct it... had a bit of a problem making it look right and still keeping the size the right size... i thought it looked ok but i suppose it will need some work... and of course sex sells.. why do you think i made a picture like this!... :3, thanks again TeRaS!
Her eyes look a bit out of focus. Boobs are to big to really be sexy. Nice design on the tattoo though. Seems a bit shiny on her hair on shoulder. I know someone's just gonna type this review as "useless", but there are already enough submissions lik ethis already out there and you really are good at drawing. Women with less clothes on are more difficult to draw.
Author's Response:
i did have a bit of trouble with the eyes on this one... i feel that her right eye is a bit squashed... i dont think they have any problems... but il mess around with them as they are easy to correct... yeah i know... i should tone down the bust... people keep commenting on it :P... i wanted her to fit in with the background so i did a abstract tattoo which was based on stars and squiggles... im still learning how to use my shine correctly and lighting... this review isnt useless... its usefull to me... i wanted one like this for two reasons... 1) get view count up on my other art... 2) another submittion for the art collab... you must understand unless you do things that stand out and get people talking... you wont get noticed :3... my next one is going to be fully clothed and with a average bust... i feel that will be a challenge for me :3
ninja stars on her nipples
Author's Response:
i wish people read what i type... *sigh*
Good drawing and good use of NG weapons... :P
Hope a draw of a Level 17 hot girl. :P
Author's Response:
why thank you... why dont you wait for the NG level collab to come out :3
Well you did a good job in my opinion, but if you want some helpful critism I'd have to say her Deltoids (Arm muscles attached to shoulder, or as some may call it her upper arms) are too big they don't really match the rest of her body. But other than that I don't see any issues with this art. Good job, and all that. ^_^ (Votes 5)
Author's Response:
i did try to correct it for a while but i just couldnt get it right... il try and correct it if i have some spare time... thanks for the usefull review...
