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1.25 / 5.00

Oct 14, 2012 | 6:56 PM EDT
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Heres a page from my web comic i just recently started doing !

heres the link to my comic:

http://jarryd215.tumblr.c om/



Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

Pretty good

I like the art style. It's like an exaggerated kind of manga (if that's even possible). I do suggest that you work on your spelling, punctuation, etc. Since comics have constant dialogue, it needs to be written professionally to be taken seriously. The situation in this part is cliche, but if it goes somewhere unique, it'll work out fine. I suppose the background could use a little more work. Also, the grey "outline" of the speech and thought bubbles makes me a bit nauseous.

JayBezzy responds:

i think the whole grammar aspect of this comic has been hard to tackle for me since im trying to find a balance between ebonics and proper grammar lol. Also this is my first time attempting to write any kind of story all haha. But i appreciate what you said and ill work on it so the comic can be better thanks for your input man ^.^