Good Work, Good To See that your art is improving Since Remember Death It Would Seem,
How About A Drawing Tip Want It?
Of Course You Would,
Okay First Thing is that The Creasing's on the side of the body(Waist Line That Is) are always there and are never downwards, there a little the side with three or more Creasing Making A ("Y") type Shape
(Hint: Try making the creasings in the series of Y's Or V's You Would See the Result is Quite Good)
The shoulders are a little pointy bend some of them down,
Also Reduce the neck length a little,
Okay Another Thing Arms Are A little Disproportionate to body, as you can see if the arms are bent down then they are only a little down from the waist line albeit the arms should be slightly longer(between the waist and the hip)
As for Coloring I Would use a darker color for every creasing, the effects are really good,
Try Putting Shadows on the Chin the neck and on the arms and hands,
These are just my tips sir you can use them its upto you to use them.
(Oh One More thing The Arms where there crossing You Missed that place to Color its still Green :p)

Anyway I Really Like Your Stories though Especially The Remember Death Series.
Good Luck To You Sir KUDOS