not bad drawing technique but this is very monochramatic, you need more skin highlights and darks, and that blur mixed with face glow adds to a sence of 2d id say never add blur like that, if you want to make the center the focus, than try using highlights and the background to get there, also do more face studies, if you think it looks awkward that is because, the hair suggests that the face is tilted twords the viewer and looking away, but then the face is tilted straight to the left side by the mouth but somehow the other eyebrow is comming through too, its good work just little details that cause the viewer to become seperated from the effort put in, im by no means a pro, but i fugured the second oppinion could help