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Element Explained: Fiia 1

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Read about the fox magnetism thing some days ago. That idea grew up quickly.
Still on the edge about the fox stuff and kinda trying to take the piss out of it, but then I realized this whole world's about taking fantasy putting a hopefully interesting spin on them and putting them in a context that's somewhere between gritty and over-the-top-awesome and kinda funny. Just gotta find that sweet spot. In the war.

So yeah if I could get feedback on that stuff that would be great.

I also had some text/pics ratio issues with this one. Too many irrelevant tidbits? Too much foreshadowing? Too many in-universe terms like Redsmithing that's not gonna make sense to people that haven't read a certain other part of the series? Horrible neglect of "show, don't tell"?

I'm also very much in the dark about those things, but I'd like to address them and provide a better service. So if you think this has any potential, please, any pointers would help.

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Bro, when are you writing the book or drawing the comic?

Seriously man. Seriously.

MarikBentusi responds:

It's actually based on a story (German tho) and I've been thinking about doing a comic one-off. Not sure if I'll be any good at it, but since people are (to my surprise) interested, I'm willing to give it a shot.

I did this multi-parter to gather some feedback like mentioned in the description.

I like the whole idea... Would make one hell of a comic series.

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