yep

my 2 favorite things.... shotguns and girls! :D :) :]

It's the end of the world

-and the first thing you grab is your...bikini top?

proportion,perspective, and execution

Let start, Her proportion of her boob is overkill time 2.The torso is the same length as the leg which give the illusion of a young child.less breast and more shadow will give the illusion of a big chest.
Now for the perspective the hand that holding the gun is off,1 is that the handle should cover the palm of her hand,2 the thumb should be bent because it is gripping,3 The sword holder if u look at the back of the gun by her abdominal and look up from that position half that empty space which is revealing the background should have her sword holder covering it .4 As for her face if u look at her head u position the hair as if the head is bent downward expose the the top of the head the feature of the head should be in that position also,but instead it as if u look at it from a front view which mean the top of the head shouldn't be expose as much.
double check to make sure your proportion and perspective in point then execute

Kool

Looks pretty kool, not a bad picture.

Still not done yet!

I'm sorry but being of the female persuasion I know how boobs should look, and right now, it looks like that girl found two basket balls and put them under her bra, please either srink them a bit or make her top less slutty because no girl (unless she is a total h0r bag) would ever wear a top like that and possiblly add somthing in the sky like a plane or explosion.